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2013-03-06 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

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Hello,Mr.Cheng. This is [이름],[이름], the manager of Purchase department. I'm returinig your call with regard to turbines delay. In your message you said that our construction plan runs behind two months and customers are already impatient about it so you want me to come up with any solution. First of all, I feel terribly sorry for the inconvience you have experience. After receiving your call, I have checked into the situation and found out that the turbines are supposed to arrive by tommorow. Our supplier said that it was included in the shimpment which was delayed due to the bad weather. So I'll make sure that you''ll receive it later tomorrow. And please tell the customer that we are going to send him a 50%discounts to use on his next purchase. Once again, I do apologazige for the problem and I hope that you can manage to soothe our customer. If you have any question or concern or want to discuss the matter further, please don't hesitate to call me at Ext. 341. Thank you.

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Hi there! This is such a wonderful work. I commend you for having a very minimal correction. I made some sentences that you could use. Always be careful with your spelling.Have a nice day! T. Aurora Hello,Mr.Cheng. >>Correct! This is [이름],[이름], the manager of Purchase department. >>Correct!  I\'m returinig your call with regard to turbines delay. >>I\'m returning your call with regards to turbines\' delay. >>Or: I\'m returning your call regarding turbines\' delay.  In your message you said that our construction plan runs behind two months and customers are already impatient about it so you want me to come up with any solution. >>Correct!  First of all, I feel terribly sorry for the inconvience you have experienced. >>Correct!  After receiving your call, I have checked into the situation and found out that the turbines are supposed to arrive by tommorow. >>Correct! >>After receiving your call, I have checked the situation and I found out that the turbines are supposed to arrive by tomorrow.  Our supplier said that it was included in the shimpment which was delayed due to the bad weather. >>Correct!( Be careful with the word \" shipment\")  So I\'ll make sure that you\'\'ll receive it later tomorrow. >>Correct!  And please tell the customer that we are going to send him a 50%discounts to use on his next purchase. >>Correct! ( Be careful with \" a 50% discount\")  Once again, I do apologazige for the problem and I hope that you can manage to soothe our customer. >>Correct! ( Be careful with \"apologize\"). If you have any question or concern or want to discuss the matter further, please don\'t hesitate to call me at Ext. 341. >>Correct! >>Or: If you have any questions,concern,or if you want to discuss the matter further, please don\'g hesitate to call me at the ext. 341  Thank you. >>Correct!  

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