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2013-03-21 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Imagine your future son told you he doesn't want to go and study in a university, what would you do and tell him? Well, first I'll try to take a deep conversation with my son. And I'll give him as much informtaion I can to help him to think about his decision. Maybe he just was in the moood for deciding some plans without any poderation. However, if he has his own plans and know what he wants to achieve, I really want to support him. Because I think going to college dosen't mean a successful life. There are many college students who even know what they want to become after their gratuation. So, I just want him to know that he has to make an effor to find his interest,passion throungh whatever he wants.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!

Wow, very well said. You gave an in-depth and comprehensive opinion. I hope that someday, you son will be successful in the future because you are there guiding him all through out the things that he will do in the future. Thanks for sharing you idea. Have a nice day and take care!! ^^

~~ T. Aurora

Imagine your future son told you he doesn\'t want to go and study in a university, what would you do and tell him?
Well, first I\'ll try to take a deep conversation with my son.

>> CORRECT

>> or, Well, I\'ll try to have a one on one conversation with my son.

>> or, Well, I\'ll try to have a meaningful conversation with my son.

And I\'ll give him as much informtaion I can to help him to think about his decision.

>> And I\'ll give as much information as I can to help him think about his decision.

Maybe he just was in the moood for deciding some plans without any poderation.

>> Maybe, he was just in the mood to decide some plans without any ponder.

>> or, Maybe, he was just in the mood to decide some plans without pondering.

However, if he has his own plans and know what he wants to achieve, I really want to support him.

>> However, if he have his own plans and he knows what he wants to achieve, then I will really support him.

Because I think going to college dosen\'t mean a successful life.

>> Because I think, going to college does not mean having a successful life.

There are many college students who even know what they want to become after their gratuation.

>> There are many college students who don\'t know what they want to be become after their graduation.

So, I just want him to know that he has to make an effor to find his interest,passion throungh whatever he wants.

>> So I just want to let him know that he has to make an effort to find his interest/passion through the things that he wants. 

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