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2019-07-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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My birthday story I woke up at 6:30 because I was sick at friday. But I am not sick right back so I was good feeling. I went swimming and went back at 10:20. I waited 2 hours and at 12:00,my friendes came. I played with my friendes for 3 hour. And I took my friendes to their home. Then I opened the presentes. I got Notebook,Sticars,Lego and another. It was very good birthday! 2019.7.1. -[이름] rite-

강사 첨삭


Hello!^^

 


Thank you for sending your homework. 


 


Cheers!

Jean



My birthday story

I woke up at 6:30 because I was sick at friday.
>> I woke up at 6:30 because I was sick last Friday.

But I am not sick right back so I was good feeling.
>> But I am not sick right now that\'s why I feel good. 

I went swimming and went back at 10:20.
>> correct~~

I waited 2 hours and at 12:00,my friendes came.
>> I waited for 2 hours and at 12:00, my friends came over. 

I played with my friendes for 3 hour.
>> I played together with my friends for 3 hours.

And I took my friendes to their home.
>> After that, I took my friends to their homes.

Then I opened the presentes.
>> Then, I opened my presents. 

I got Notebook,Sticars,Lego and another.
>> I got a notebook, stickers, Lego, and so on. 

It was very good birthday!
>> It was a wonderful birthday party!

2019.7.1.
-[이름] 

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