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How important do you think it is to use public transport?
If all of people like to ride by own car, our road is supposed to be complicate a lot. So whenever I go to church, I use a electric motor bus for new people who come. It is very clean, big and comfortable. It could be meet people and see street. When I use the bus, I think I would be use my calorie. It is same thing If we use another public transport. Especially, I like to use a train when going a long distance. To use public transport could be make our country clean air
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Teacher ELLY.
How important do you think it is to use public transport?If all of people like to ride by own car, our road is supposed to be complicate a lot.
>>If all people will drive their own cars, our road will be too complex to navigate.
So whenever I go to church, I use a electric motor bus for new people who come.
>>So, whenever I go to church, I use an electric powered bus for the newcomers.
It is very clean, big and comfortable.
CORRECT!
or>>It is huge, comfortable and very neat.
It could be meet people and see street.
>>I can meet people and see the streets.
When I use the bus, I think I would be use my calorie.
>>When I use the bus, I think I lose some calories.
It is same thing If we use another public transport.
CORRECT!
or>>It is similar to using a different public transport.
Especially, I like to use a train when going a long distance.
>>Especially, I like to use a train when traveling long distance.
To use public transport could be make our country clean air
>>Using the public transport can the air in our country clean and fresh.
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