my homework in 1, Jun
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Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Parents are the best teachers? Why? Support your answer with an example.
I agree about this issue even though son and daughter are affected bad things by parents.
We live together with our parents until to get married except in the case of someone. In particular, we depend on our parents when we were young as until university student. At that time, we had no identity ourselves, so we learned a lot of things by parent even if it is just small things as well as important things. For example, we learn about way of brush our teeth, way of using chopstick, method of writing and so on. Furthermore, we learn paradigm and way of thinking from our parents. It is happened naturally even if parents don’t teach us by force because we look at our parent’s behavior and listen to their speech while all life. So, their paradigm and thinking seriously affects us all of our thought. Of course, sometimes their behavior and thought give us bad effect. For instance, I’m a celibate. The reason of my choice is that I don’t want to be like my parents. It means that they have sacrificed their life for me and my brother. They had to forgive a lot of things for our education. Of course, I really love them and I am always thankful for their love of me, but I want to live my life. My thought as this also is what I learn by my parents.
However, I think that parents are the best teacher of my life.
강사 첨삭
Buenas Noches Mr. [이름],
Well done! Once again you were good in expressing your thoughts. You were able to share your experience. Just be more organize with your thoughts.I hope to see you later!
t.Sheela
Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Parents are the best teachers? Why? Support your answer with an example.I agree about this issue even though son and daughter are affected bad things by parents.
>> I agree on this issue even though some childrens are affected by the bad behaviours of their parents.We live together with our parents until to get married except in the case of someone.
>> We live together with our parents until we get married except in some case.
In particular, we depend on our parents when we were young as until university student.
>> In particular, we depend on our parents when we were young until we become a University student.
At that time, we had no identity ourselves, so we learned a lot of things by parent even if it is just small things as well as important things.
>> At that time, we don\'t know a lott\'s of things around us, so we learned a this things from our parents even if it is just small things or important things.
For example, we learn about way of brush our teeth, way of using chopstick, method of writing and so on.
>> For example, we learn the way of brushing our teeth, way of using chopstick, method of writing and so on.
Furthermore, we learn paradigm and way of thinking from our parents.
>> Furthermore, we learn the paradigm and the way of thinking from our parents.
It is happened naturally even if parents don’t teach us by force because we look at our parent’s behavior and listen to their speech while all life.
>> It happenes naturally even if parents do not teach us by force but since we look at our parent’s behavior and listen to their speech while we are still alive.
So, their paradigm and thinking seriously affects us all of our thought.
>> So, their paradigm and thinking seriously affects all of our thought.
Of course, sometimes their behavior and thought give us bad effect.
>> Correct!
>>OR Of course, their are times when we also inherit their bad behaviour.
For instance, I’m a celibate.
>>Correct!
>>OR For instance, I will be a celibate.
The reason of my choice is that I don’t want to be like my parents.
>>Correct!
It means that they have sacrificed their life for me and my brother.
>> It means that they sacrifice their life for me and my brother.
They had to forgive a lot of things for our education.
>> They had forgot a lot of things for our education.
Of course, I really love them and I am always thankful for their love of me, but I want to live my life.
>> Of course, I really love them and I am always thankful for their love, but I want to live my life.
My thought as this also is what I learn by my parents.
>> My thoughts are also what I learn from my parents.However, I think that parents are the best teacher of my life.
>> Correct!
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