my homework in 13, Jul

2012-07-17 · 첨삭 강사 abby

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Some people believe that visitor to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. This discussion has to not deal with a black and white issue. If we argue about that with a black and white issue, it will be occurred some trouble between local people and visitor. There are so many different cultures in the world like food, religions, clothes as well as behavior. For instance, Muslim don’t eat beef and they only eat pork which is killed with their special method. Also some Asian feel uncomfortable to touching head and sexual joke. We have to understand about that. If they have stayed our culture, we should respect their culture. We have to not ask Muslim to eat beef or don’t touch Chinese head. In the other hand, in case of law and social rules, visitors have to respect local appointment. Some behaviors are not crime in visitor’s nation, but it may be crime or discourteous in others nations. If visitors break the law, it will be not simple trouble. In the worst case, it may lead to diplomacy problem. So, visitors and host have to respect each other, and then, if it happens some troubles, they should share their opinions with respect each other.

강사 첨삭

Hi to you again!^_^      You have a very positive point of view regarding this issue. I deeply respect it. I agree with what you said, that we should respect other nation\'s culture. Also, when we visit other places, we should always follow the saying, \"When in Rome, do as the Romans do.\" I bet you agree with this quote. I appreciate your effort in doing your homework today. I hope that we will share more about this in class. Good day to you! ----T. Sheela---^_^ Here are my corrections for you: This discussion has to not deal with a black and white issue. >>>This kind of discussion should not be in black and white. >>>This issue should not be dealt and written in black and white. If we argue about that with a black and white issue, it will be occurred some trouble between local people and visitor. >>>If we will argue about it as if the issue is documented, certainly, a trouble will occur between the local people and the visitors.There are so many different cultures in the world like food, religions, clothes as well as behavior. >>>Cultures all over the world are different especially when we talk about food, religion, the way we wear clothes as well as the way we should behave. For instance, Muslim don’t eat beef and they only eat pork which is killed with their special method. >>>For instance, Muslim people don\'t eat beef, they only eat pork killed with their special method. Also some Asian feel uncomfortable to touching head and sexual joke. >>>Also, some Asians feel uncomfortable when someone touch their head and say some sex related jokes. We have to understand about that. >>>We have to understand that. >>>We must understand these cultural differences. If they have stayed our culture, we should respect their culture. >>>If they respect our own culture, then we should respect theirs too. We have to not ask Muslim to eat beef or don’t touch Chinese head. >>>We should not force a Muslim to eat beef, or we should not touch a Chinese head intentionally.In the other hand, in case of law and social rules, visitors have to respect local appointment. >>>On the other hand, in the case of laws and social rules, visitors should respect it. Some behaviors are not crime in visitor’s nation, but it may be crime or discourteous in others nations. >>>Some behaviors may not be a crime to the country where the visitor came from, but a crime to the nation where he or she is visiting. If visitors break the law, it will be not simple trouble. >>>If a visitor breaks the law, it will surely not a simple trouble. In the worst case, it may lead to diplomacy problem. >>>The worst scenario is that this simple trouble may lead to a diplomacy problem between the host country and the country where the visitor came from.So, visitors and host have to respect each other, and then, if it happens some troubles, they should share their opinions with respect each other. >>>So both the visitor and the host country should respect each other, but if troubles are really inevitable, then they should respect each other\'s opinion.

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