my homework in 13, Mar

2012-04-10 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

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Maybe, job satisfaction of some workers is money. The important thing of their life or job is always to earn a lot of money. On the other hand, some people want to get pleasure though the job. They regard job satisfaction as completeness or result of their favorite works. Of course, if you can have a big money for your good results of your favorite work, it’ll be the best. Somebody has accomplished it in their field. But, most of people couldn’t archive it. Most of employees have worked about what they don’t like it and haven’t gotten much money. In this case, they haven’t enjoyed their job and life. It is unfortunate that. So, I recommend finding your favorite work as my junior in university. If you enjoy your work, you can success in the field, and then you can earn the big money. First of all, Find your favorite job!

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Hi Mr. [Name] wook, I think you made your homework in your office. Well, I am glad to read another beautiful thought from you.You have defended you answer very well. See you tomorrow! T.Sheela Maybe, job satisfaction of some workers is money. >> Maybe, job satisfaction for some workers is money. The important thing of their life or job is always to earn a lot of money. >> The important thing in their life or job is always to earn a lot of money. On the other hand, some people want to get pleasure though the job. >> Correct! >>OR On the other hand, some people want to get pleasure from their job. They regard job satisfaction as completeness or result of their favorite works. >> Correct! >>OR They regard job satisfaction as completeness or result of their hard work. Of course, if you can have a big money for your good results of your favorite work, it’ll be the best. >> Of course if your can earn big amount of money,it is a good result from your hard work. It will also be the best. Somebody has accomplished it in their field. >> Correct! But, most of people couldn’t archive it. >> Correct! >>OR But, most of the people can not archive it. Most of employees have worked about what they don’t like it and haven’t gotten much money. >> Most of employees had worked hard on something they do not like and they did not get much money from it. In this case, they haven’t enjoyed their job and life. >> In this case, they have not enjoyed their job and their life. It is unfortunate that. So, I recommend finding your favorite work as my junior in university. >>It is unfortunate. So, I recommend people to find their favorite job while they are in their Junior years in the University. If you enjoy your work, you can success in the field, and then you can earn the big money. >> If you enjoy your work, you will successed in the field you have choosen, and you can earn big money from it. First of all, Find your favorite job! >>Correct!  

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