my homework in 14, May

2012-05-17 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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Apart from the obvious financial problem what other consequences can occur as a result of excessive gambling? Well, I don’t exactly know about this question because I don’t enjoy gambling even though it is computer game. But, I’m going to guess what consequences can occur as a result of excessive gambling. I think if I enjoy excessive gambling, I will be damaged my health of mental and physical. When I concentrate porker or Go-stop which is Korean traditional game of gambling, I should smoke more than normal situation, maybe I will smoke every minute, and I have to seat in a chair for 10 or 12 hours without any stretching. It will be a poison to my body. And then, I will imagine about game for all day even if I got big money or lost money in game. Therefore I will not focus on my work and I always would like to go to gambling place. Finally, I’ll lose my job! Furthermore I’ll spend most of my time at gambling place, so I can’t bother about my family and my friends. At last I’ll be alone even though I win a lot of money by gambling. Did you stop gambling if you won 10 million dollar by just one game? I think you never stop doing. You will have more game for more money! Gambling is it. It is very calm today because my section chief have entered education curse until tomorrow and my team leader left for a business trip to another city. I feel free! See you! Sheela!

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Hola Mr. [이름]! Gambling is a game that you are not even sure if you\'ll win or lose and I am very happy to know that you don\'t play any gambling game. I think you were able to relax at work today. I\'ll see you later! T.Sheela Apart from the obvious financial problem what other consequences can occur as a result of excessive gambling?Well, I don’t exactly know about this question because I don’t enjoy gambling even though it is computer game. >>>Correct! >> OR Well, I do not exactly know about this question because I do not enjoy gambling even though it is a computer game. But, I’m going to guess what consequences can occur as a result of excessive gambling. >>>Correct! >>>OR But, I am going to guess what are the consequences of excessive gambling.I think if I enjoy excessive gambling, I will be damaged my health of mental and physical. >>>I think if I will be addicted in gambling, it will damage me physically and mentally. When I concentrate porker or Go-stop which is Korean traditional game of gambling, I should smoke more than normal situation, maybe I will smoke every minute, and I have to seat in a chair for 10 or 12 hours without any stretching. >>>Once I try to concentrate on playing Poker or Go-stop, which is a Korean traditional gambling game, I might smoke more than before and maybe I will have to seat in a chair for 10 or 12 hours without stretching. It will be a poison to my body. >> Correct!And then, I will imagine about game for all day even if I got big money or lost money in game. >> And then, I will be thinking about the game for all day even if I am not sure If I will win a big money or not. Therefore I will not focus on my work and I always would like to go to gambling place. >>>Therefore, I will not focus on my work and I will always want to go to the gambling place. Finally, I’ll lose my job! >> Correct!Furthermore I’ll spend most of my time at gambling place, so I can’t bother about my family and my friends. >> Furthermore, I will be spending most of my time at the gambling place or casino and I won\'t be able to bother my family and my friends. At last I’ll be alone even though I win a lot of money by gambling. >> At last, I will be alone even though I will be winning a lot of money from gambling.Did you stop gambling if you won 10 million dollar by just one game? I think you never stop doing. >> Are you going to stop gambling once you won a 10 million dollar in just one game?. I think you will never stop. You will have more game for more money! Gambling is it. >> You will play more to have more money. It is Gambling.It is very calm today because my section chief have entered education curse until tomorrow and my team leader left for a business trip to another city. >> It is very calm today because my section chief has entered an education course until tomorrow and my team leader left for a business trip to another city. I feel free!>> Correct!See you! Sheela! >>See you Sheela!

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