my homework in 18, Apr

It’s generally believed that some people are born with certain talents and other are not. We know great geniuses for music, science, art and so on, for example Mozart, Leonardo da Vinci, and Isaac Newton. Do you think they are born with certain genius talents? Is it all even though it is true? I don’t agree exactly. Of course, they might have some different talents than ordinary people until they were born, but it is not all. Well, they had tried very hard to develop their abilities and they had concentrated only their part. Leonardo had studied about drawing for all his life and Newton had studied about science, too. And furthermore, geniuses who we think they have great talents have real big huge passion about their part. They could sacrifice their all things for aims. How about us? Have you studied and concentrated about one thing? Could you sacrifice your life for your goal? If it is possible, we’ll be extraordinary people in our part, too.

Hello, there!Excellent writting! Keep it up!Teacher Sheela Here are some corrections for you:It’s generally believed that some people are born with certain talents and other are not.>>It\'s generally believed that some people are born with certain talents and others are not.We know great geniuses for music, science, art and so on, for example Mozart, Leonardo da Vinci, and Isaac Newton.>>CorrectDo you think they are born with certain genius talents? >>Correct I don’t agree exactly. >>I don\'t exactly  agree. Of course, they might have some different talents than ordinary people until they were born, but it is not all. >>Of course, they might have some different talents than ordinary people until they were born, but it is not applicable for all.Well, they had tried very hard to develop their abilities and they had concentrated only their part.>>Well, they had tried very hard to develop their abilities and they had concentrated only on their part.Leonardo had studied about drawing for all his life and Newton had studied about science, too. >>CorrectAnd furthermore, geniuses who we think they have great talents have real big huge passion about their part. >>And furthermore, geniuses, who we think they have great talents, have real huge passion about their part. They could sacrifice their all things for aims. >>CorrectHow about us? >>CorrectHave you studied and concentrated about one thing? >>CorrectCould you sacrifice your life for your goal? >>CorrectIf it is possible, we’ll be extraordinary people in our part, too.>>If it is possible, we\'ll be extraordinary people in our part, too.