my homework in 22, Jun
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I enjoy raining except in the case of work time on outdoor. The sound of rain and the fresh air of when it is raining make me to refresh in my mind.
When I was so young, exactly I was an elementary school student, I sometimes had enjoyed making sandcastles with friends on raining day. Of course, we used to play in water, too. And then, when I was in the military, if it was raining on weekend, we usually played soccer in the rain. It was a big event for fun and unity each other in the military. Of course, to work in the rain was really terrible in the military, because we had to wash our clothes and shoes by ourselves. Anyway, nowadays if I have free time when it is raining, I enjoy having time in the calm café which has big window. Reading books and listening music in the café makes me to feel relaxed and stable. When I had a girlfriend, we used to go to café in hotel nearby Han River whenever it was raining even if I paid lots of money for a cup of coffee. And then, I enjoy driving my car in rain. Of course, not in heavy rain. Driving a car with fresh air makes me to feel bracing and free. Anyway, in order to enjoy raining, I need to free time when it is raining.
Oh. I would attend our class, but I woke up on quarter to midnight from nap. If I had a plan something on Friday night, I would say to you. Exactly, I had a plan for our class, but I couldn’t because of my tiredness. I’ll try to not have nap before class. SEE YOU certainly!!
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Hello Mr. [이름],
I think I am not really good in prediction. Last Friday, I thought you went somewhere because it was unusual for you not to indicate See you! in your composition.Anyway, I\'m vey happy that we will hear each other\'s voice later. See you my Dear!
T.Sheela
I enjoy raining except in the case of work time on outdoor.
>> I enjoy rain except in some cases like working time outdoor.
The sound of rain and the fresh air of when it is raining make me to refresh in my mind.
>> The sound of rain and the fresh air of the rain makes me refresh my mind. When I was so young, exactly I was an elementary school student, I sometimes had enjoyed making sandcastles with friends on raining day.
>> When I was exactly elementary school student, I sometimes enjoy making sandcastles with friends on rainy days.
Of course, we used to play in water, too.
>> Of course, we used to play in the water, too.
And then, when I was in the military, if it was raining on weekend, we usually played soccer in the rain.
>> Correct!
It was a big event for fun and unity each other in the military.
>> It was a big event, we had fun and unity from each other in the military.
Of course, to work in the rain was really terrible in the military, because we had to wash our clothes and shoes by ourselves.
>> Correct!
Anyway, nowadays if I have free time when it is raining, I enjoy having time in the calm café which has big window.
>> Anyway, nowadays if I have free time when it is raining, I enjoy it by having time in the calm café which has big window.
Reading books and listening music in the café makes me to feel relaxed and stable.
>> Reading books and listening to the music in the café makes me to feel relaxed and stable.
When I had a girlfriend, we used to go to café in hotel nearby Han River whenever it was raining even if I paid lots of money for a cup of coffee.
>> Correct!
And then, I enjoy driving my car in rain.
>> Correct!
>>OR Also, I enjoy driving my car in rain.
Of course, not in heavy rain.
>> Correct!
>>OR Of course, not during heavy rain.
Driving a car with fresh air makes me to feel bracing and free.
>> Correct!
Anyway, in order to enjoy raining, I need to free time when it is raining.
>>Anyway, in order to enjoy rain, I need to have a free time when it is raining. Oh. I would attend our class, but I woke up on quarter to midnight from nap.
>> Oh. I was supposed to attend our class, but I woke up at quarter to midnight from my nap.
If I had a plan something on Friday night, I would say to you.
>> If I had a plan last Friday night, I would have told you.
Exactly, I had a plan for our class, but I couldn’t because of my tiredness.
>> I exactly had a plan to attend our class, but I wasn\'t because of my tiredness.
I’ll try to not have nap before class.
>>Correct!
SEE YOU certainly!!
>>I\'ll certainly see you!
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