my homework in 22, May
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be good parents. There is no program which is about being good parents. Maybe, my parents were not taught about role of parents anywhere. Of course, me neither. I guess one of the most difficult things in life is to being good parents. However, nobody is taught about that in Korea until now. In the future, from this time forward, it is necessary. The best way for that is government has to make new class about that in middle school and high school. As middle school education is compulsory in Korea, so most of people can get knowledge to being good parents.
By my opinion, we have to learn about skill of communication, play and understanding.
Skill of communication will be used for sharing opinion with offspring. It is not easy to lead talk a lot of subjects with child, so they need to skill of communication. And then, they have to play with child as baseball, basketball as well as computer game. Maybe they should learn about their proper rule. Skill of understanding is the best important skill for parents. They should understand well about their child, what they want. The child is not a marionette of parents. Parents can’t control dream or road of their child. So, they have to understand well child’s will and dream.
These skills can’t acquaint by oneself, need relevant education. This is the reason why it is necessary to education of being good parents.
강사 첨삭
You are absolutely right! Parenting has got to be the most difficult profession in the world. There is no guide book about it. Most people learn to do it through experience. I enjoyed every single detail you\'ve involved on your composition. I appreciate your effort in doing this. Well, I\'ll talk to you later!
T. Sheela
I think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be good parents.>>Correct!
>>I think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to become a good parent.
There is no program which is about being good parents.
>>There is no program about parenting.
OR:>>There are no programs about parenting.
Maybe, my parents were not taught about role of parents anywhere.
>>Maybe my parents were not taught about the roles of parents anywhere.
Of course, me neither.
>>Correct!
I guess one of the most difficult things in life is to being good parents.
>>I guess one of the most difficult things in life is being good parents.
>>I guess one of the most difficult things in life is to be a good parent.
However, nobody is taught about that in Korea until now.
>>However, nobody has taught that in Korea until now.
In the future, from this time forward, it is necessary.
>>It is necessary nowadays.
The best way for that is government has to make new class about that in middle school and high school.
>>The best way is for the government to add this subject to the curriculum of middle schools and high schools.
As middle school education is compulsory in Korea, so most of people can get knowledge to being good parents.
>>Since middle school education is compulsory in Korea, most people can learn to be good parents.By my opinion, we have to learn about skill of communication, play and understanding.
>>In my opinion, we have to learn skills in communication, playing and understanding.Skill of communication will be used for sharing opinion with offspring.
>>Communication skills will be used for sharing opinions with their offsprings.
It is not easy to lead talk a lot of subjects with child, so they need to skill of communication.
>>It is not easy to discuss a lot of subjects with children so they need to have good communication skills.
And then, they have to play with child as baseball, basketball as well as computer game.
>>And then, they have to play baseball, basketball or computer games with their children.
Maybe they should learn about their proper rule.
>>Maybe they need a guide to do these things.
Skill of understanding is the best important skill for parents.
>>The skill in understanding is the best skill for parents to learn.
>>The skill in understanding is the most important skill that parents need to acquire.
They should understand well about their child, what they want.
>>They should understand well what their children want.
The child is not a marionette of parents.
>>Children are not the puppets of parents.
Parents can’t control dream or road of their child.
>>Parents can\'t control the dreams or aspirations of their child.
So, they have to understand well child’s will and dream.
>>So they have to understand well their child\'s will and dreams.These skills can’t acquaint by oneself, need relevant education.
>>These skills are not innate, they need to be learned.
This is the reason why it is necessary to education of being good parents.
>>This is the reason why it is necessary for parents to be well educated about this.
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