my homework in 28, Mar
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I think the main function of a university is that universities should give students various experiences of knowledge.
In case of Korea, most of high school students always have to study about mathematics, science, English and so on for to enter a high level university. They never have a chance for experiences of knowledge and their life. They have to seat their chair until 11:00 pm in their school or academy.
Therefore, I wish to university in Korea encourage students to challenge a lot of things and to widen their mental vision about knowledge and their life.
To learn skills are needed in workplaces may do after enter company. The university can’t teach a lot of skill about job in workplaces to students. In modern times, many things change so faster than the past. Of course, many skills about job are changed so fast. So, many curriculums in University can’t follow that.
I think the university is the place where students have a dream.
강사 첨삭
Well done Mr. [이름],
Again I am impress on how you defent your answer. I would like to talk about this later in our class because you have a very interesting thoughts. See you later.
T.Sheela
I think the main function of a university is that universities should give students various experiences of knowledge.
>>I think the main function of a university is that, universities should give students various experiences to acquire knowledge.In case of Korea, most of high school students always have to study about mathematics, science, English and so on for to enter a high level university.
>>In the case of Korean people, most of high school students always have to study mathematics, science, English and so many more for them to enter a high level university.
They never have a chance for experiences of knowledge and their life.
>>They never had a chance to experiences acquiring knowledge in their life.
They have to seat their chair until 11:00 pm in their school or academy.
>>They have to seat in their chair until 11:00 pm at their school or academy. Therefore, I wish to university in Korea encourage students to challenge a lot of things and to widen their mental vision about knowledge and their life.
>>Therefore, I wish the Universities in Korea to encourage the students to be challenged and to widen their mental vision about knowledge and their life.To learn skills are needed in workplaces may do after enter company.
>> To learning new skills are needed in a workplace for them to enter a company.
The university can’t teach a lot of skill about job in workplaces to students.
>>The Universities can teach the students a lot of skills in a certain workplace.
In modern times, many things change so faster than the past.
>> In modern times, many things are changing so fast, unlike the past.
Of course, many skills about job are changed so fast.
>> Of course,skills are needed in a job, and they keep on changing so fast.
So, many curriculums in University can’t follow that.
>> So many of the curriculums in the University can not follow that change.I think the university is the place where students have a dream.
>> I think the university is the place where students dream.
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