my homework in 30, May

2012-05-31 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

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I don’t at all agree about this argument. I think it is wrong common knowledge because it can’t apply all of person. I don’t exactly know why it was begun, but I’m going to guess about the reason. Usually, women consider many things and detail when they do something, and they think relationship of each other is very important. On the other hands, by the man, aim is more important than anything. In principle they concentrate to their goal regardless of detail and relationship. And then, women tend to care someone like baby or her family. This situation comes from traditional society in which women care her family at home and man hunt something in outside. I think it is the reason such as above that we regard women are usually two to three years more mature than men. Of course, these days, there are many couples are consist of older man and younger woman in Korea. However, the reason of these cases is not that younger women are more mature than older man. Well, most of men in Korea have to enter military for 2 years and more. So, naturally Korean men start their professional job to late more than Korean women. Also, man’s average life expectancy is shorter than woman. These are the relevant reason that there are many couples consist of older man and younger woman. For such above reasons, I don’t agree that women are usually more mature than young men. What I said yesterday is not boom alcohols. Bomb alcohols are right. I know my pronunciation was problem. Haha.

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Wonderful thoughts Mr [이름]! I am impress on how you delivered your thoughts. I agree, that women and men are both mature in different ways. You are right, men are responsible in feeding their families while women\'s responsible in taking good care of the family. Both in this generation,we can not deny the fact that most of the men now are carefree specially if they did not marry the woman who gave birth to their son. So the tendency is, woman has to raise the child on his own without any help from the father. But I also think, this can also happen to some men. Well, I like this topic so let us talk about it later. I am sorry, i think it was not because of your pronunciation but I think it was all my fault. I was busy listening to you that I did not double check my spelling. see you ! T.Sheela I don’t at all agree about this argument. >> I don\'t agree at all about this argument. I think it is wrong common knowledge because it can’t apply all of person. >>I think it is wrong common knowledge because it can not be applied to everyone. I don’t exactly know why it was begun, but I’m going to guess about the reason. >> I don’t exactly know when did it start, but I’m going to guess about the reason. Usually, women consider many things and detail when they do something, and they think relationship of each other is very important. >>Usually, women consider many things in detailed when they do something, and they think relationship is very important. On the other hands, by the man, aim is more important than anything. >>On the other hands, Mam aim the most important thing more than anything. >> Or On the other hand, Men\'s goal is to do the most important thing more than anything. In principle they concentrate to their goal regardless of detail and relationship. >> In principle, Men concentrate to their goal regardless of the detail and relationship. And then, women tend to care someone like baby or her family. >> And then, women tend to care to people like their baby or their family. This situation comes from traditional society in which women care her family at home and man hunt something in outside. >>This situation comes from a traditional society in which women take care of their family at home and men hunt something outside. I think it is the reason such as above that we regard women are usually two to three years more mature than men. >>I think it is the reason why we regarded that women are usually two to three years more mature than men. Of course, these days, there are many couples are consist of older man and younger woman in Korea. >> Of course, these days, there are many couples which consist of older man and younger woman in Korea. However, the reason of these cases is not that younger women are more mature than older man. >>Correct! Well, most of men in Korea have to enter military for 2 years and more. >> Well, most of men in Korea have to enter the military for 2 years and more. So, naturally Korean men start their professional job to late more than Korean women. Also, man’s average life expectancy is shorter than woman. >> So, naturally Korean men start their professional job later than Korean women. Also, Men\'s average life expectancy is shorter than women. These are the relevant reason that there are many couples consist of older man and younger woman. >> These are the relevant reason why there are many couples that consist of older man and younger woman. For such above reasons, I don’t agree that women are usually more mature than young men. >>Because of this reasons, I don’t agree that women are usually more mature than men.What I said yesterday is not boom alcohols. Bomb alcohols are right. >> What I said yesterday is not boom alcohols. Bomb alcohols is the correct one. I know my pronunciation was problem. Haha. >> I know my pronunciation was the problem.haha

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