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After 10 years, I’ll be 44 years old. I should not like to think about that. I don’t want to be older forever.I’d like to be a Peter Pan!!
Anyway, honestly I don’t care after 10 years from now. The reason is that I have concentrated my goal which is study abroad in British on next year.
This goal is my wish while last 5 years. So I have to concentrate all my energy for my goal while 1 year from now. Therefore I have no time and energy to spare to think about after 10 years.
Of course, I have a roughly plan for my future. If I enter university which I want in London, after graduate the university, I’d like to work in Europe or Australia. I guess it’ll be so valuable experience for my career if it is possible. And then I want to keep on staying abroad even though it is not easy.
The most important thing after 10 years I’d like to design the architecture which is so impressive.
My ultimate aim is to design the building which gives impressive space to people.
See you.
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Hi Mr.[이름],
Thank you for sharing you plan 10 years from now. Actually, we are not sure if our plan 10 years from now will not change.10 years is a very long time but I think planning ahead of time is a good motivation for you.
You have a wondeful plan in your life and I hope you will achieve all those. Just stay strong and positive like what you are now!:)
T.Sheela
After 10 years, I’ll be 44 years old.
>>Correct!
I should not like to think about that.>>I would not like to think about that.
I don’t want to be older forever.
>> I don\'t want to be old forever.
I’d like to be a Peter Pan!!
>>I want to be like Peter Pan!!Anyway, honestly I don’t care after 10 years from now.
>>Honestly, I don\'t care what will happen 10 years from now.
The reason is that I have concentrated my goal which is study abroad in British on next year.
>>The reason is that, I am concentrating my goal in studying abroad particularly in British next year. This goal is my wish while last 5 years.
>> This goal is my wish to last for 5 years.
So I have to concentrate all my energy for my goal while 1 year from now.
>> So I have to use all my energy for my goal 1 year from now.
Therefore I have no time and energy to spare to think about after 10 years.
>> Therefore, I have no time and energy to think about 10 years from now.Of course, I have a roughly plan for my future.
>> Correct!
If I enter university which I want in London, after graduate the university, I’d like to work in Europe or Australia.
>> Once I enter the University that I want to study in London and graduate from that University. I would like to work in Europe or Australia.
I guess it’ll be so valuable experience for my career if it is possible.
>>I guess it will be a valuable experience for my career if it will come true.
And then I want to keep on staying abroad even though it is not easy.
>>And I want to stay abroad for good, eventhough it will not be easy.The most important thing after 10 years I’d like to design the architecture which is so impressive.
>> The most important thing that I want to happen 10 years from now is, I would like to design something impressive.My ultimate aim is to design the building which gives impressive space to people. >>My ultimate aim is to design a building which gives impressive space to people. See you.
>>Correct!
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