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When I was a 2nd high school student, I heard about an architect first. There had been a class which taught kind of jobs. One day, we had a time to announce our future job. At that time, my dream had been to be a politician, but many friends announced about an architect. I was curious about that, so I searched. When I read that, an architect is so attractive job, because they can build architecture with their idea and sketch, also they control all of process of building. It was so great to me! At that time, my job of dream has been to be an architect. (Of course, when I was a high school student, I would like to do just build my house y myself.) My score of college scholastic ability test was the 5th in my class, it was in the top 8% in Korea, but I couldn’t submit my application to my wannabe school. The department of architecture has been so popular in Korea, so I decided to change school. It was one of my regrettable things in my life. Anyway, I started my course in school with huge expectation and ambition, however, reality was so different from my expectation. There was no romance of campus, just we had time for drinking meeting with seniors in everyday. And then, class of school was so similar to high school. It was not my expectation. After I felt disappointed about school, I used to enjoy traveling and meeting friends on class time. When I was freshman, I got the worst score, all F credits. However, my military service period made me to change. To be continued

Hi Mr. [이름], I got confuse to some of your sentences,so please have time to read my corrections if it matches your opinion.I\'ll be waiting for the continuation.:) T.Sheela When I was a 2nd high school student, I heard about an architect first. >> When I was a 2nd year high school student, It was my first time to hear about architecture. There had been a class which taught kind of jobs. >> There was a class which taught all kind of job. One day, we had a time to announce our future job. >> One day, we were asked to announce our future dream job. At that time, my dream had been to be a politician, but many friends announced about an architect. >>At that time, my dream was to be a politician, but many friends announced about being an architect. I was curious about that, so I searched. >>Correct! When I read that, an architect is so attractive job, because they can build architecture with their idea and sketch, also they control all of process of building. >>When I read that, architect became an attractive job to me, because they can build architecture with their idea and sketch, also they control all of the processes of constructing a building. >>When I read about the achitecture, it was an attractive job because they can build their own idea and sketch and also they control all the process in making a building. It was so great to me! At that time, my job of dream has been to be an architect. >> It was so great for me! At that time, my dream job changed into being an architect. (Of course, when I was a high school student, I would like to do just build my house y myself.) >>(Of course, when I was a high school student, I had dream of building my house by myself.) My score of college scholastic ability test was the 5th in my class, it was in the top 8% in Korea, but I couldn’t submit my application to my wannabe school. >> My score in college scholastic ability test was rank 5th in my class, my score was 8% to the top in Korea, but I couldn’t submit my application to my wanna be school. >> My score in college scholastic ability test was rank 5th in my class, my score was 8% to the top in Korea, but I couldn’t submit my application to my dream school. The department of architecture has been so popular in Korea, so I decided to change school. >>Correct! It was one of my regrettable things in my life. >> It was one of my regrettable decision I ever made in my life.Anyway, I started my course in school with huge expectation and ambition, however, reality was so different from my expectation. >> Anyway, I started my course in that school with a huge expectation and ambition, however, in reality, it was so different from my expectation. There was no romance of campus, just we had time for drinking meeting with seniors in everyday. >> There was no romance in campus,we just had time drinking and meeting with seniors everyday. And then, class of school was so similar to high school. >> And then,the class was so similar to high school. It was not my expectation. >> Correct! After I felt disappointed about school, I used to enjoy traveling and meeting friends on class time. >> After being disappointed from the school, I used to enjoy traveling and meeting friends during class time. When I was freshman, I got the worst score, all F credits. However, my military service period made me to change. >> When I was a freshman, I got the worst score, they are all F credits. However, my military service period made me change. To be continued >>To be continued...