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Do you think it is right to teach Sex Education in Schools? Of course! I think the best palace of Sex Education is middle school. In Korea, most of people think they have to hide related facts of sex and should not enjoy about that. I had been thought too. This phenomenon was result from Confucianism and Christianity. Thus, this situation brings more problems like single mother and abortion. When I was middle school and high school student, I had never been taken Sex Education in school. I had no choice but to get some information at pornographies and something like that. It is not right method. So, I think educational institution have to give correct and clear Sex Education to students. The best time is in middle school because nowadays many boys and girls interest in related facts of sex from middle school. If government didn’t give education to students, they take a lot of wrong information by wrong way and they commit a sexual crime like rape, abortion and prostitution. Furthermore, we need some place which is like library or museum for Sex Education. It’ll contribute to give high quality and relevant Sex Education to many students. Yesterday I had a sore throat. So, I ate a drug and vitamin C and I slept so early. Of course, I feel a little pain for my bronchial tubes today. But, I believe it’ll be better. And I have good news! I’ll have 20 minutes class with you from next Monday! Of course, I have to pay additional cost, but it’s not a problem. See you!

Hi there! Thank you for your composition today! You did a great job in writing this. You were able to express your ideas clearly and you have established your firm stand on the matter. By the way,  I am so delighted with the good news you\'ve shared with me today. Thank you for extending your class. Take care and have a wonderful day! Do you think it is right to teach Sex Education in Schools? >> CorrectOf course! I think the best palace of Sex Education is middle school. >> Yes, of course. I think that the best time to teach Sex Education is in Middle School.In Korea, most of people think they have to hide related facts of sex and should not enjoy about that. >> In Korea, most people think that they have to be discreet about sex and they should not enjoy that.I had been thought too. >> I thought so, too.This phenomenon was result from Confucianism and Christianity. >> This resulted from Confucianism and Christianity.Thus, this situation brings more problems like single mother and abortion. >> Thus, this situation brings more problems like an increasing number of single mothers and abortion.When I was middle school and high school student, I had never been taken Sex Education in school. >> When I was a Middle School and High School student, I didn\'t take Sex Education at school.I had no choice but to get some information at pornographies and something like that. >> I had no choice but to get some information from pornography sites and other similar materials.It is not right method. >> It\'s not a proper method.So, I think educational institution have to give correct and clear Sex Education to students. >> I think that Educational Institutions have to provide clear and correct Sex Education to students.The best time is in middle school because nowadays many boys and girls interest in related facts of sex from middle school. >> The best time is in Middle School because nowadays, many middle school boys and girls are curious about facts related with sex.If government didn’t give education to students, they take a lot of wrong information by wrong way and they commit a sexual crime like rape, abortion and prostitution. >> If the government won\'t educate students, they will get wrong information in a wrong way and they may commit seual crimes like rape, abortion, and prostitution.Furthermore, we need some place which is like library or museum for Sex Education. >> Furthermore, we need a place like library or museum for Sex Education.It’ll contribute to give high quality and relevant Sex Education to many students.>> It\'s contribute in giving high quality and relevant Sex Education to many students.Yesterday I had a sore throat. >> CorrectSo, I ate a drug and vitamin C and I slept so early. >> I took a medicine and vitamin C and I slept so early.Of course, I feel a little pain for my bronchial tubes today. >> Of course, I feel a little pain in my throat today.But, I believe it’ll be better. >> CorrectAnd I have good news! >> I have a good news for you.I’ll have 20 minutes class with you from next Monday! >> I\'ll have a 20-minute-class with you from Monday.Of course, I have to pay additional cost, but it’s not a problem. >> CorrectSee you!  >> Correct