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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY What inspires you to make the extra effort on a task? Various reasons inspire me to make the extra effort on a task. First of all, money exactly inspires me to overcome many pains, for example overtime work, hold my desire for buying and etc. However, most important thing of what inspires me is my dream. Now, I can stop doing homework and I can search on the internet or SNS. But, I don’t. Also I may play with my friends or girls at club instead have exercises every evening in gym. But, I don’t. The reason of these, I have to achieve three things until the next 1 year for my dream. I must get high level in the IELTS test, make my body to healthy and save money for study abroad. I think most important thing in human life is dream even if that is tiny thing. Dream exactly inspires people to make the extra effort on a task. Take care. See you Sheela.

Hi!!^-^ Thank you for your composition. You did a great job. I wish you all the luck in achieving your dream.^_^ I provided you some corrections on your sentences. You can review them if you have time. See you in class. Take care!^-^ __Teacher Sheela__   HOMEWORK FOR TODAYWhat inspires you to make the extra effort on a task?Various reasons inspire me to make the extra effort on a task. >> Correct!First of all, money exactly inspires me to overcome many pains, for example overtime work, hold my desire for buying and etc. >> Correct!However, most important thing of what inspires me is my dream. >> However, the most important thing that inspires me is my dream.Now, I can stop doing homework and I can search on the internet or SNS. But, I don’t. >> Now, I can stop doing my homework and just search it in the internet or SNS but I didn\'t.Also I may play with my friends or girls at club instead have exercises every evening in gym. But, I don’t. >> I also can play with my friends or girls at the club instead but I still chose to go to the gym to do my exercise every night.The reason of these, I have to achieve three things until the next 1 year for my dream. >> The reason for this is that I would like to achive three things for my dream.I must get high level in the IELTS test, make my body to healthy and save money for study abroad. >> I must get a high level on my IELTS test, make my body healthy and save money for my studies abroad. I think most important thing in human life is dream even if that is tiny thing.  >> I think the most important thing in human life is having a dream. Even if that dream in small.Dream exactly inspires people to make the extra effort on a task. >> Dreams inspires people to make extra effort on their every day work.Take care. See you Sheela.