My ideal boyfriend
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Many times, I think about my boyfriend in my future. As I think that , my lists of ideal boyfriend become longer and longer...I am not considering of appearance, because that isn't important. I think, the most important thing is a personality such as kind and thoughtful.And I like smart man, so I hope my boyfriend is very smart. And his job is also important,I think he already has a good job,because he is smart.I wish to meet boyfriend who has these conditions.
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Hi [이름],
Wow!!Cool I like it, haha. I agree with you physical
appearance is not important. What is important is
what he possesses deep inside.
Hmm I wish you can find him soon.
See you tomorrow,
-- Connie --
Many times, I think about my boyfriend in my future.
>> For many times, I think of my future boyfriend.
As I think that , my lists of ideal boyfriend become longer and longer.
>> As I’m thinking about it, my list of my standard boyfriend becomes longer and longer.
..I am not considering of appearance, because that isn't important.
>> I’m not considering on the physical appearance because it isn’t important.
I think, the most important thing is a personality such as kind and thoughtful.
>> Correct
And I like smart man, so I hope my boyfriend is very smart.
>> Correct
And his job is also important,
>> His job is also important.
I think he already has a good job,because he is smart.
>> I’m expecting that he has a good job because of course he is smart.
I wish to meet boyfriend who has these conditions.
>> Correct
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