My ideal job, and company.
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My ideal job is which brings me achievement. Although I agree that the purpose for working is earning money, I\'m looking forward to make career path toward jobs which can I enjoy while do it. To enjoy my job, working in which company is important. My ideal company is the environment that can gives stability to employees. It could be awareness in industry, reasonable salary, or adequate employee welfare. One of the reason quit my job was desire for working in better place. The company matching with my ideal are ideal to other people as well. Therefore, I\'m making an effort to be a competitive person who has better skills and ability for the job I want.
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Thank you for this Scarlet.
My ideal job is which brings me achievement.
>>>> My ideal job is one which brings me achievements.
Although I agree that the purpose for working is earning money, I\'m looking forward to make career path toward jobs which can I enjoy while do it.
>>>> Although I agree that the purpose for working is earning money, I\'m looking forward to making a career path towards jobs which I can enjoy while doing it.
To enjoy my job, working in which company is important.
>>>> correct
My ideal company is the environment that can gives stability to employees.
>>>> OR: My ideal company is one which can give a stable environment to employees.
It could be awareness in industry, reasonable salary, or adequate employee welfare.
>>>> correct
One of the reason quit my job was desire for working in better place.
>>>> One of the reasons I quit my job was the desire for working in a better place.
The company matching with my ideal are ideal to other people as well.
>>>> The company matching with what I find ideal is ideal to other people as well.
Therefore, I\'m making an effort to be a competitive person who has better skills and ability for the job I want.
>>>> correct
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