My ideal life
학생이 쓴 원문
When I think of my ideal life, I can think of where I live on the top of my head. My father has always said that getting my own home is most important thing. So, when I grow up and earn enough money to buy house, I want to live where I can swim once a day and have barbecue party with my friends. Also, the house has to be filled with board games that I can play with.
Now I don’t have my dream job or what I want to become, but I want to earn money what I really like to do and eager to. Earning money by doing what I like will be one of my ideal life.
Also, I want to fall in love with who really likes me and the people who can give good energy to each other. If I have a boyfriend, I want to travel lots of countries I haven’t been and also Spain that I really want to visit.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Emily! Thank you so much for your time and for writing your homework. I really appreciate it!
See you in class~ :)
-T. Nikki :)
When I think of my ideal life, I can think of where I live on the top of my head.
>> When I think about my ideal life, the place where I would like to live is at the top of my head.
My father has always said that getting my own home is most important thing. So, when I grow up and earn enough money to buy house.
>> My father always says that getting my own house is the most important thing. So, when I grow up and earn enough money to buy one.
I want to live where I can swim once a day and have barbecue party with my friends. Also, the house has to be filled with board games that I can play with.
>> I want to live where I can swim once a day and have a barbecue party with my friends. Also, the house has to be filled with board games that we can play with.
Now I don’t have my dream job or what I want to become, but I want to earn money what I really like to do and eager to.
>> Now, I still cannot think of my dream job or what I want to become, but what I am really eager to do now is earn some money.
Earning money by doing what I like will be one of my ideal life.
>> Earning money by doing what I like is part of my ideal life.
Also, I want to fall in love with who really likes me and the people who can give good energy to each other.
>> Also, I want to fall in love with someone who really likes me and be surrounded by people who bring positive energy.
If I have a boyfriend, I want to travel lots of countries I haven’t been and also Spain that I really want to visit.
>> If I\'ll have a boyfriend someday, I want us to travel to different countries that we\'ve never been to. Also, we will visit Spain which is the country that I personally like to travel to.
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