My ideal vacation
학생이 쓴 원문
I’m a person, love to go to beach on a summer vacation. It was the only the best my ideal vacation. Occasionally, I enjoy appreciating the landscape on pictures of Internet. Exactly, i love see between over sea to blue sky. Whenever i go to the beach, it was used to remind my childhood. When i was 8 years old, one day, my family vacated to 대천 beach. In there, i wore swimming suit then my mom teach how to swim, play with siblings against even i cried due to didn’t to go home. Sometimes, i’m lost in these memories. Because the moment never come back again. but, if covid will be done as soon as possible, i want to go to the beach with my family again.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름] [이름]!^^
Thank you for sharing you best memories while on vacation with your family. I hope this pandemic would soon be over so we could create great memories with our loved ones again.^^
See you in class!
Always,
~Kelly^^
I’m a person, love to go to beach on a summer vacation. >> I\'m a person who loves to go to the beach on summer vacation.
It was the only the best my ideal vacation.
>> It is my ideal vacation.
Occasionally, I enjoy appreciating the landscape on pictures of Internet.
>> Occasionally, I enjoy checking some landscape pictures on the Internet.
Exactly, i love see between over sea to blue sky.
>> I particularly love looking at the sea and the blue sky.
Whenever i go to the beach, it was used to remind my childhood.
>> Whenever I go to the beach, I reminisce about my childhood.
When i was 8 years old, one day, my family vacated to 대천 beach.
>> When I was eight years old, my family and I went to 대천 beach.
In there, i wore swimming suit then my mom teach how to swim, play with siblings against even i cried due to didn’t to go home.
>> I wore a swimming suit then my mom taught me how to swim. I also played with my siblings. I even cried because I didn\'t want to go home.
Sometimes, i’m lost in these memories.
>> Sometimes, I\'m lost in these memories.
Because the moment never come back again.
>> Because we can\'t go back to those times again.
but, if covid will be done as soon as possible, i want to go to the beach with my family again.
>> But, as soon as the COVID pandemic will be over, I want to go to the beach with my family again.
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