My interests
학생이 쓴 원문
I am interested in taking care of my pet, the cutest hedgehog in the world. He gives me a big joy by just existing.
Also, I’m interested in extreme sports such as skiing because it makes me excited and makes me braver person. I have never done scuba diving and sky diving but really want to try those.
Lastly, I’m interested in playing computer games. But it interrupts me to study. So I should reduce playtime.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]. Awesome work. Thank you.
- T. Gabby :)
I am interested in taking care of my pet, the cutest hedgehog in the world.
>> Correct.
He gives me a big joy by just existing.
>> His existence brings me joy.
Also, I’m interested in extreme sports such as skiing because it makes me excited and makes me braver person.
Also, I’m interested in extreme sports such as skiing because it makes me excited and makes me braver person.
>> Also, I’m interested in extreme sports such as skiing because it makes me excited and it makes me braver person.
I have never done scuba diving and sky diving but really want to try those.
>> I have never done scuba diving and sky diving but I really want to try those.
Lastly, I’m interested in playing computer games.
Lastly, I’m interested in playing computer games.
>> Correct.
But it interrupts me to study. So I should reduce playtime.
>> But it interrupts me my studies so I think I should reduce my playtime.
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