My job after retirement

2021-04-28 · 첨삭 강사 Don

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Dear [Name], Thank you for your lesson. I am happy to talk with you. I have to find anothet job after 9 years. Because of retirement age. It\'s a law in Korea. I thought my job after retirement. If I don\'t achieve sales performance every year, my company want to leave me. So my retirement maybe come faster than I have thought. If I retire the company, I want to be a travel guide. I can meet many people, if I do this job. I can use English with foreign people, if I guide them. What do you think about my future job?

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Thank you for doing your composition. See you tomorrow ^^

T. DON

Dear [Name],
Thank you for your lesson. I am happy to talk with you.

>> CORRECT

I have to find anothet job after 9 years. Because of retirement age. It\'s a law in Korea.

>> I have to find another job after 9 years because of retirement age. It\'s the law in Korea.

I thought my job after retirement.

>> I thought of my job after my retirement.

If I don\'t achieve sales performance every year, my company want to leave me. So my retirement maybe come faster than I have thought.

>> If I don\'t achieve my sales performance every year, my company would let me go so my retirement maybe will come earlier than what I thought.

If I retire the company, I want to be a travel guide.

>> If I retire in my company, I want to be a travel guide.

I can meet many people, if I do this job. I can use English with foreign people, if I guide them.

>> CORRECT

What do you think about my future job?

>> CORRECT

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