My memorable birthday celebration in my life
학생이 쓴 원문
My memorable birthday celebration was 10 years ago when my family members went on a trip in Europe. My birthday is in middle of June during the summer vacation.
We were on a group tour with a couple of tour guides. We tend to forget what date that day is, busy in doing sightseeing at many places. When we were on a sunset cruise on Seine River in Paris, a waiter poped open a champagne bottle just in front of me. I startled at making a loud noise. He spoke loud something in French, making a big smile. At first, I couldn't understand what he said but I noticed instantly that it meant "Happy birthday to You". I'd learned in school that French people always speak in French even to a foreigner even though the foreigner couldn't understand French. The information from the textbook became real just in front of me on the cruise. At any way, I could receive my birthday celebration from all people on the cruise. I could spend the unforgettable night with French dishes with my love.
강사 첨삭
Hello there! Thank you so much in sharing such a precious memory to me.
You must be thrilled on that day.^^
I hope I would hear more about it on our next class.
By the way, I\'m very impressed with your sentences.
I could see that you had used some good words that will enhance your vocabulary.^^
Take care always and see you soon.^^
---T. Lara
My memorable birthday celebration was 10 years ago when my family members went on a trip in Europe.
>> CORRECT!
My birthday is in middle of June during the summer vacation.
>> My birthday is in the middle of June during summer vacation.We were on a group tour with a couple of tour guides.
>> CORRECT!
We tend to forget what date that day is, busy in doing sightseeing at many places.
>> We tend to forget what date it is, since we\'re busy in doing sightseeing at many places.
When we were on a sunset cruise on Seine River in Paris, a waiter poped open a champagne bottle just in front of me.
>> When we were on a sunset cruise on Seine River in Paris, a waiter popped open a champagne bottle just in front of me.
I startled at making a loud noise.
>> I got startled I heard a loud noise.
He spoke loud something in French, making a big smile.
>> He spoke in a loud manner sopmething in French while making a big smile.
At first, I couldn\'t understand what he said but I noticed instantly that it meant \"Happy birthday to You\".
>> CORRECT!
I\'d learned in school that French people always speak in French even to a foreigner even though the foreigner couldn\'t understand French.
>> I learned in school that French people always speak in French to a foreigner even though the foreigner couldn\'t understand French.
The information from the textbook became real just in front of me on the cruise.
>> CORRECT!
At any way, I could receive my birthday celebration from all people on the cruise.
>> In all directions, I could receive my birthday greetings from the people on the cruise.
I could spend the unforgettable night with French dishes with my love.
>> I could spend the unforgettable night with French dishes with my loved ones.
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