My most memorable trip destination is ’New Zealand’

2024-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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My most memorable trip destination is ’New Zealand’ Because, I had long trip alone as first time. My aunt lives in New Zealand so I had trip to there during the 3 weeks. And I had travel alone of them 1 week. I took public transportation on trip because I don’t have license. Luckily, New Zealand public bus was good for traveler. Maybe, The bus tooks long time on Christchurch (my aunt live here) to Queenstown at the 8 hours. Anyway, I didn’t bored that bus had a rest and nice view during the move. The lake ‘Tekapo’ was particularly beautiful lake. I’m so sad I didn’t stay there 1 day. I will trip to there later!

강사 첨삭

Thank you for bringing me to New Zealand, Da[이름]! I think there are still many wondrous things to discover there.-Faith-
My most memorable trip destination is ’New Zealand’ Because, I had long trip alone as first time.
>> My most memorable trip destination is New Zealand because I had a long trip alone for the first time.
My aunt lives in New Zealand so I had trip to there during the 3 weeks.
>> My aunt lives in New Zealand, so I traveled there for three weeks.
And I had travel alone of them 1 week.
>> Also, I had the chance to travel alone for one week.
I took public transportation on trip because I don’t have license.
>> I took public transportation on the trip because I don’t have a license.
Luckily, New Zealand public bus was good for traveler.
>> Luckily, the public buses in New Zealand are good for travelers.
Maybe, The bus tooks long time on Christchurch (my aunt live here) to Queenstown at the 8 hours.
>> Maybe the bus takes a long time from Christchurch, where my aunt lives, to Queenstown, about eight hours.
Anyway, I didn’t bored that bus had a rest and nice view during the move.
>> Anyway, I was not bored because the bus had rest stops and nice views during the journey.
The lake ‘Tekapo’ was particularly beautiful lake.
>> Lake Tekapo was particularly beautiful.
I’m so sad I didn’t stay there 1 day.
>> I was so sad that I did not stay there for one more day.
I will trip to there later!
>> I will travel there again later!

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