my neighborhood
학생이 쓴 원문
About My neighborhood’s good things and bad things? You know, first good thing about my area is that suji is very quiet place. Honestly, I hate noisy place, it’s because noisy place makes me confused and also makes me tired. But you know suji is quiet place despite of a lot of traffic. That’s why I love my neighborhood in the middle of everything. and second good parts of my city is my city has a lot of public transportation. So, I can go everywhere when I want. Umm and bad points... let me see..it’s hard to say bad parts of my place. because subjectively I think suji is perfect place to me. I mean quiet and comfortable to go somewhere! It so fits me!
강사 첨삭
Hello Robin!
You have a good idea about your neighborhood, but avoid repeating the same word to describe your place. You might explain why you said it or you could also talk about the people in the place. Let\'s get more ideas on how to make your answer better. :)
You have a good idea about your neighborhood, but avoid repeating the same word to describe your place. You might explain why you said it or you could also talk about the people in the place. Let\'s get more ideas on how to make your answer better. :)
~T. Maine
>> I want to tell you about my neighborhood\'s good and bad things.
You know, first good thing about my area is that suji is very quiet place.
>>First of all, the good thing about my area is that Suji is a very quiet place.
Honestly, I hate noisy place, it’s because noisy place makes me confused and also makes me tired.
>> Honestly, I hate noisy places because it makes me confused and also tired.
But you know suji is quiet place despite of a lot of traffic.
>> Suji is a calm place despite a lot of traffic nearby.
That’s why I love my neighborhood in the middle of everything.
>>Correct.
and second good parts of my city is my city has a lot of public transportation.
>>Second, my city has a lot of public transportation.
So, I can go everywhere when I want.
>>Correct.
Umm and bad points... let me see..it’s hard to say bad parts of my place.
>>Well, for the bad points, it\'s hard to say something about my place.
because subjectively I think suji is perfect place to me.
>>It is because subjectively, I think Suji is a perfect place for me.
I mean quiet and comfortable to go somewhere!
>> It\'s comfortable to go somewhere in this kind of environment.
It so fits me!
>>It fits me!
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