My new product

2021-02-10 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I have tested my new product for this month. It was good result at first . but it was bad at SKHynix. The issue was performance. so I and engineer changed program. but performance was not enogh. It was normally a good performance. I have worked huge site skhynix, samsung and big bank. so I had always this issue . But this time was very hard. My engineer was freelancer . besides He was a part-time job. so I have a headache.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]. Good luck with that. I hope you resolve it soon.
- T. Beth
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I have tested my new product for this month.
>>> correct   
It was good result at first . but it was bad at SKHynix.
>>> It had a good result at first, but it was bad at SKHynix.    
The issue was performance.
>>> correct   
>>> OR: The issue was related to its performance.   
so I and engineer changed program. but performance was not enogh.
>>> So an engineer and I changed the program but the performance was not enough.   
It was normally a good performance.
>>> correct    
I have worked huge site skhynix, samsung and big bank. 
>>> I have worked in huge sites like  skhynix, samsung and big banks.    
so I had always this issue . 
>>> I always had this issue.    
But this time was very hard. 
>>> correct     
My engineer was freelancer . 
>>> My engineer was a freelancer.    
besides He was a part-time job. 
>>> In addition, he was just a part-timer.   
so I have a headache.
>>> so it is giving me a headache.    

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