My objection

My objection is to be a diplomatic officer. So, I'll major in english. but, the people around me say that If you want to be a diplomatic officer, you must specialize in politics and diplomacy. but my opinion is not. to be a diplomatic offcier who works in english country, it is necessary that understanding of culture and literal construction. what is your idea about this?

Hello [이름]!

Your composition is very interesting.

I think you make a really tough argument about the issue.

You are very smart.

In my opinion, you will be a really good English student.

I agree with you in a lot of areas regarding this issue. Like you, I believe that being fluent in English will give a person power or the capacity needed in order to understand culture and literal construction because mastery of the language is an important tool. But in the area which handles the legal and political aspects of being a diplomatic officer, I think being good in English may not be enough. In conclusion, I think it is necessary to be articulate in both English and Diplomacy.^^

Here are my corrections for you:

My objection is to be a diplomatic officer. So, I'll major in english.

>>My objective is to be a diplomatic officer which is why I will major in English.

but, the people around me say that If you want to be a diplomatic officer, you must specialize in politics and diplomacy.

>>But the people around me say that if I want to be a diplomatic officer, I must specialize in politics and diplomacy.

but my opinion is not.

>>However, I disagree.

to be a diplomatic offcier who works in english country, it is necessary that understanding of culture and literal construction.

>>To be a diplomatic officer who works in English-speaking countries, it is necessary to have the ability to understand culture and literal construction.

what is your idea about this?

>>CORRECT