My opinian about Earthquake{12/16}
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I think Earthquake is fine for the Earth because I read that Earthquake affect good things to Earth.
1. It makes Earth science to develop.
2. It can be made a new ground.
That\'s why.
But Earthquake can kiled many people.
That\'s too sad...... : (
-The End-
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Jean
I think Earthquake is fine for the Earth because I read that Earthquake affect good things to Earth.
>> I read it somewhere that there are some advantages of earthquakes so I think it\'s fine. Some of the advantages are the following:
1. It makes Earth science to develop.
>> It makes Earth science develop.
>> or: It develops earth science.
2. It can be made a new ground.
>> New grounds are created.
That\'s why.
But Earthquake can kiled many people.
That\'s too sad...... : (
>> Those are the good things about earthquakes. However, it can also kill many people and that\'s too unfortunate.
-The End-
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