My opinion~
학생이 쓴 원문
My opinion about the person who smokes.
I think that If people smoke in this way that not to disturb other people, I don’t mind they are smoking.
but I agree that women shouldn't smoke because women would pregnent someday. Meterial of cigarett can infuluence to baby.
강사 첨삭
Dear [이름].
I just finished reading your opinion. Its a good thing you were able to verbalize your opinion regarding a person who smokes especially, ladies. I agree to that. Smoking could result to a negative effect on the different organs in the body as well as, it could also result to being impotent. When we say impotent, you cannot conceive. And, if a woman, smokes and she is pregnant it may cause a teratogenic effect on the baby that she is conceiving.
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My opinion about the person who smokes.
>> CorrectI think that If people smoke in this way that not to disturb other people, I don’t mind they are smoking.
>> I think that If people smokes and not affecting other people around, I don't mind them smoking.but I agree that women shouldn't smoke because women would pregnent someday. Meterial of cigarett can infuluence to baby
>> But I agree to the idea that it was not good to see women smoking. Because sooner or later, they will be pregnant. Moreover, the contents of those cigarettes have a bad effect to babies.
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