My opinion!

2013-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Louis

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In South Korea, the ruling party had been changed and the Sunshine policy had been closed as well. It was the Sunshine policy that South Korean government guarantees a big financial support regarding North Korean. After the changing of policy, most North Korean are getting worse and being suffered from hunger and poverty. In my own opinion, even though we are separated as 2 different countries, we have the same ancestors. Therefore South Korean government has to support some financial resources. That is the matter of humanity.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Helena!

Again, I am very pleased to know that you really agree of the fact that South Korea has to extend help to the North Koreans. It's just saddening how the condition of North Koreans becomes worse. Let's hope, though, that they would be given attention to, and that their rights will be protected. See you, my dear!

-Louise-

In South Korea, the ruling party had been changed and the Sunshine policy had been closed as well.

>> Correct.

 It was the Sunshine policy that South Korean government guarantees a big financial support regarding North Korean.

>> Correct.

After the changing of policy, most North Korean are getting worse and being suffered from hunger and poverty.

>> After the changing of policy, most North Koreans are getting worse and suffer from hunger and poverty.

In my own opinion, even though we are separated as 2 different countries, we have the same ancestors.

>> Correct.

Therefore South Korean government has to support some financial resources.

>> Therefore, the South Korean government has to support some financial resources.

That is the matter of humanity.

>> Correct.

 

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