My opinion about bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up
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I think bullying should be made a crime. We face with many hardships when we growing up. Some are bullying friends and say it’s just common process to students. But we learn bullying is bad that we must not do it. So I think bullying is same as crime.
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Hi [이름] ! I feel the same way. Victims of bullying get hurt no only physically but mentally as well. They should put a stop to this.
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I think bullying should be made a crime.
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We face with many hardships when we growing up.
>> We face many hardships when we grow up.
Some are bullying friends and say it’s just common process to students.
>> Some people bully their friends and classmates and say that it\'s a common phase for students.
But we learn bullying is bad that we must not do it.
>> We should learn that bullying is a bad thing that we must not do.
So I think bullying is same as crime.
>> So I think that bullying is the same as crime.
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