My opinion about eating healthy
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I agree with the opinion that the eating habit of younger generation effects on their health negatively. As the fast food spread largely in our lives, many children can usually eat them. They are attracted by the taste because it’s more stimulating than other food which is not salty and sweet. Children get used to fast food and do not want to eat healthy food. I think it makes their health worse. Fast food includes high fat, and it has high calories. The more fat they eat, the worse their health. As this reason, I think children should change their eating habit healthier than the past.
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Hello [이름]! Thank you for giving your opinion regarding this topic. I truly appreciate your thoughts. ^_^
T. Irene
I agree with the opinion that the eating habit of younger generation effects on their health negatively.
>>> I agree with the opinion that the eating habit of younger generation affects their health negatively.
As the fast food spread largely in our lives, many children can usually eat them.
>>> As fast foods are getting popular and common, it became easier for many children to avail of them.
They are attracted by the taste because it’s more stimulating than other food which is not salty and sweet.
>>> They are attracted by the taste because it’s more stimulating than other foods which are not salty and sweet.
Children get used to fast food and do not want to eat healthy food.
>>> Children got used to fast food and do not want to eat healthy food.
I think it makes their health worse.
>>> I think it makes their health suffer.
Fast food includes high fat, and it has high calories.
>>> Fast food includes high fat and calories.
The more fat they eat, the worse their health.
>>> The more fat they eat, the worse their health becomes.
As this reason, I think children should change their eating habit healthier than the past.
>>> For this reason, I think children should change their eating habits into a healthier one than the past.
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