My opinion about physical education in school
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Yes, I think. Because only sitting down on a chair is not good for our health. We should often move our body. Students should grow up so I think it’s helpful for their growth. And I think it can also relieve their stress.
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Hi [이름]! That\'s true! Physical education is as important as other subjects in school. It should not be neglected. It can help us a lot in terms of keeping fit and being athletic.
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Yes, I think. Because only sitting down on a chair is not good for our health.
>> Yes, I think because only sitting down is not good for our health.
We should often move our body.
>> CORRECT
Students should grow up so I think it’s helpful for their growth.
>> Students grow up and this would be beneficial for their growth.
And I think it can also relieve their stress.
>> And I also think that it can relieve stress.
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