My opinion about privacy.
학생이 쓴 원문
Privacy is very important for healty life.
During a time that privacy is guaranteed, people can heal their energy and can make most motive work because of safe and comfort mind state.
If someone always monitor me, I feel anxiety so much and finally I will have some problem in my mind.
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Thank you for doing your homework. ^^
Privacy is very important for healty life.
>>Privacy is very important for a healthy life.
>>During a time that privacy is guaranteed, people can replenish their energy and can make the most out of working, because of the safe and comfort mind state.
If someone always monitor me, I feel anxiety so much and finally I will have some problem in my mind.
>>If someone always monitors me, I would be very anxious and finally I will have some problem in my mind.
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