my opinion about religine.
학생이 쓴 원문
I have no religion. I believe in myself. I am faithful to my present life.
Although my parents had their religion, I didn\'t choose religion.
Of course, I don\'t think people with religion are wrong. It\'s just their choice.
For people in difficult situations, religion can be a help, by religion activities, can meet people, and they can feel comfort and relax.
And the good thing about having religion is that many civilizations have emerged not only in Korea but also around the world, and various religious beautiful buildings have happened.
In the past, religion also had a role in integrating people.
But there are more people who don\'t have religion these days.
And it is not mandatory, but i can\'t understand that people pay to church 10% of its income.
강사 첨삭
Hi Evan:)
Religion is a good thing that unites people by faith. It\'s a personal choice as well. It depends on you on how you are going to interpret it.
PS: I don\'t know if it is still happening now, the 10% contribution to the church. I hope it already stopped. Hahaha!
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I have no religion.
>> CORRECT
I believe in myself.
>> CORRECT
I am faithful to my present life.
>> CORRECT
>> Although my parents have their religion, I still chose to not have one.
Of course, I don\'t think people with religion are wrong. It\'s just their choice.
>> CORRECT
For people in difficult situations, religion can be a help, by religion activities, can meet people, and they can feel comfort and relax.
>> For people in difficult situations, religion can be helpful. This is through religious activities and meeting other people. This can make them feel more comfortable and relaxed.
And the good thing about having religion is that many civilizations have emerged not only in Korea but also around the world, and various religious beautiful buildings have happened.
>> And the good thing about having a religion is that many civilizations have emerged, not only in Korea, but also around the world. Many religious infrastructures are also built.
In the past, religion also had a role in integrating people.
>> CORRECT
But there are more people who don\'t have religion these days.
>> CORRECT
And it is not mandatory, but i can\'t understand that people pay to church 10% of its income.
>> And it is not mandatory, but I don\'t understand why some people pay the church 10 % of their income.
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