My opinion about the statement: “Beauty is skin deep”.
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I’m agree with that, because beauty is not all in our life. Sometimes it can be needed and some are want beauty but we should focus on another one. No matter beauty is important, personality is the most important thing. Make effort to become a good person is harder than making beautiful appearnace. So I think personality is more important than beauty.
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I’m agree with that, because beauty is not all in our life.
>> I agree with this because beauty will not remain for our entire life.
>> I agree with this because beauty will not remain for our entire life.
Sometimes it can be needed and some are want beauty but we should focus on another one.
>> Sometime people think they need to be beautiful but they shouldn\'t.
No matter beauty is important, personality is the most important thing.
>> No matter how much beauty means to a person, personality is always the thing that stands up from a person.
Make effort to become a good person is harder than making beautiful appearance.
>> Making an effort to become a good person is harder than making a beautiful appearance.
So I think personality is more important than beauty.
>> CORRECT
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