My opinion of a North Korea's new leader

2010-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 RJ

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North Korea's dictator announced that his son got a promotion as one of the leaders of the military force in North Korea. His son is just 26years old so he doesn't have any experiences as a leader or even a government worker. According to the articles issued in South Korea based upon North Koreans who live the border between China and N.Korea, they don't want to respect him as a new leader even though they are learning the song admiring him. They know there is no reason he can be a leader unless he is Kim jung-il's son. N.Korea is under a lot of pressure casued by socio-economic problems. There is no doubt they need to focus on chaning their system in order to get over difficulties they faced.

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Hello [이름], Thanks for sharing your ideas about our topic. I just hope the citizens of North Korea will be safe when they decide to transfer the power to Kim Jong Un. Yes, he is too young to be a leader (I just realized he is younger than me). Talk to you later! -RJ-   North Korea's dictator announced that his son got a promotion as one of the leaders of the military force in North Korea. >>correct His son is just 26years old so he doesn't have any experiences as a leader or even a government worker. >>correct According to the articles issued in South Korea based upon North Koreans who live the border between China and N.Korea, they don't want to respect him as a new leader even though they are learning the song admiring him. >>According to the articles issued in South Korea based upon North Koreans who live in between the border of China and N.Korea, they don't want to respect him as a new leader even though they are learning the song admiring him. They know there is no reason he can be a leader unless he is Kim jung-il's son. >>They know there is no other reason he can be a leader aside from the fact that he is Kim Jung Il's son. N.Korea is under a lot of pressure casued by socio-economic problems. >>correct There is no doubt they need to focus on chaning their system in order to get over difficulties they faced. >>There is no doubt they need to focus on changing their system in order to get over the difficulties they face.

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