My opinion regarding bullying
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t think that we can classify people regarding likely being bullied. No matter what, we should not find reasons from victims. Therefore, I\'d like to talk about perpetrators.
There are some people who more likely to bully others. They tend to not care about the future, and other classmates. The reason for bullying is absence of sanctions on their behavior. In my opinion, the terms for perpetrator\'s parents are also necessary. Teenagers should be protected, and be guided from adults, so the action increasing efforts on preventing school bullying must be executed. For example, the group program for increasing membership among classmate, or enhancing education for teachers who charge in managing class could be helpful.
Educating Teenagers is same as guiding one being towards member of society. To make society to better place, we should focus on making school to peaceful environment for our future.
강사 첨삭
Thank you so much for this Scarlet. You\'re right, the perpetrators are the problems in cases of bullying.
I don\'t think that we can classify people regarding likely being bullied.
>>>> OR: I don\'t think that we can classify people as being likely to be bullied.
No matter what, we should not find reasons from victims.
>>>> correct
Therefore, I\'d like to talk about perpetrators.
>>>> correct
There are some people who more likely to bully others.
There are some people who more likely to bully others.
>>>> There are some people who are more likely to bully others.
They tend to not care about the future, and other classmates.
>>>> correct
The reason for bullying is absence of sanctions on their behavior.
>>>> correct
In my opinion, the terms for perpetrator\'s parents are also necessary.
>>>> correct
Teenagers should be protected, and be guided from adults, so the action increasing efforts on preventing school bullying must be executed.
>>>> Teenagers should be protected and be guided by adults, so increasing efforts on preventing school bullying must be executed.
For example, the group program for increasing membership among classmate, or enhancing education for teachers who charge in managing class could be helpful.
>>>> For example, the group program for increasing membership among classmate, or enhancing education for teachers who are in charge of managing class could be helpful.
Educating Teenagers is same as guiding one being towards member of society.
Educating Teenagers is same as guiding one being towards member of society.
>>>> correct
To make society to better place, we should focus on making school to peaceful environment for our future.
>>>> To make society a better place, we should focus on making school to be a peaceful environment for our future.
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