My opinion: the most difficult place to survive;DESERT
학생이 쓴 원문
I never want to live in the desert. I think, it is the most difficult place to survive. I\'ll cite two reason why it is.
First, I can\'t drink enough water, because desert has not enough water. Water is vital thing for living things. In many survival comic books, the characters suffer because of not enough water.
Second, it\'s too hot. I hate hot weather, and I have nose disease so dried weather is very harmful. Of course, dried weather has lots of advantages, but desert is too dry.
강사 첨삭
Homework: What do you think it would be like to live in a desert?
>> I would never want to live in a desert.
I think, it is the most difficult place to survive.
>> I think it is the most difficult place to live in.
OR
>> I think it is difficult to survive in this place.
I\'ll cite two reason why it is.
>> I\'ll cite two reasons why.
First, I can\'t drink enough water, because desert has not enough water.
Second, it\'s too hot.
First, I can\'t drink enough water, because desert has not enough water.
>> First, I couldn\'t drink enough water because a desert doesn\'t have enough water.
Water is vital thing for living things.
>> This is a good sentence.
In many survival comic books, the characters suffer because of not enough water.
>> In many survival comic books, the characters suffer because of water scarcity.
Second, it\'s too hot.
>> This is a good sentence.
I hate hot weather, and I have nose disease so dried weather is very harmful.
>> I hate hot weather, and I have a nose disorder so dry weather is very harmful for me.
Of course, dried weather has lots of advantages, but desert is too dry.
>> Dry weather has lot of advantages, but the weather in deserts is too dry.
Hello, Daniel! Thanks for doing your homework. However, be careful with word usage please.
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