My paradise

My paradise is a fanciful world where troubles melt like snow in spring. There have great nature. Like fairy tale, I live with fairy and blue birds. Also There are my family and my friends. In addition, we talk to nature things for example, trees, birds, flowers and animals even a cup. I can use to magic instead of science. cooking utensils and broom of moving themselves. And I can teleport to under the tree, appointed by me. Another vehicle is clouds. Isn't it convenience? Most important things are peace and happiness. There have no crime, fighting and even a war. When I was late to appointment or spend hard time, I always imagine my paradise. It is not real, but I don't care. Reason to love my paradise, it is not real. Perhaps I use my paradise as an escape from reality.

Hi [이름],   Very candid article, great job. !! Here are the corrections, Connie   My paradise is a fanciful world where troubles melt like snow in spring. >> Correct There have great nature. >> The nature is really great. Like fairy tale, I live with fairy and blue birds. >> Correct Also There are my family and my friends. >> Also, with me are my family and friends.  In addition, we talk to nature things for example, trees, birds, flowers and animals even a cup. >> In addition to that, we can to nature like trees, birds, flowers and animals even in a non-living thing like a cup. I can use to magic instead of science. >> I can use magic instead of science. cooking utensils and broom of moving themselves. >> While doing household chores, utensils and brooms can move themselves. And I can teleport to under the tree, appointed by me. >> I can teleport under the tree, through my command.  Another vehicle is clouds. Isn't it convenience? >> Another vehicle is clouds, isn’t it convenient?  Most important things are peace and happiness. >> The most important things are peace and happiness.  There have no crime, fighting and even a war. >> No crime, fighting and even war. When I was late to appointment or spend hard time, I always imagine my paradise. >> Whenever I’m late with my appointment, or if I’m spending a hard time, I always imagine my paradise. It is not real, but I don't care. >> Correct Reason to love my paradise, it is not real. >> The reason to love my paradise is it isn’t real. Perhaps I use my paradise as an escape from reality. >> Correct