my parents job.
학생이 쓴 원문
my father is social worker.
he helps alot of kids everyday.
he play with poor kids and look after them. also he teach some times.
he provide a lot of toys..
my mother works at nursery. everyday she make a song for kids and teach it.
she efford to make kids happy. and she play with kids.
i think that my parents are so helpful people
강사 첨삭
Hello there paul, it was really nice to knw that you are very proud of your parents!
Having our parents around always make us strong so Im happy to know that you make them as your role model..;0)
I commend you for a job well done!
T.Cam
my father is social worker.
>>My father is a social worker.he helps alot of kids everyday.
>>correct (but start your sentence with a capital letter)he play with poor kids and look after them.
>>He plays with poor kids and at the same time look after them.
also he teach some times.
>>He also teach them somtimes.he provide a lot of toys..>>He provides a lot of toys.my mother works at nursery.
>>My mother works in a nursery school.
everyday she make a song for kids and teach it.
>>Everyday she composes a song for kids and teach them how to sing it.she efford to make kids happy. and she play with kids.>>She exerts much effort to make kids happy.i think that my parents are so helpful people
>>I think my parents are so helpful.
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