My personal experience

2025-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Chammy

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Before I left for the United States, I went on a one-night, two-day farewell trip with friends I had shared a dorm life with in high school and maintained a friendship with for over 10 years. The experience of my friends expressing their sadness, preparing gifts for me, and cooking delicious meals together will remain a cherished memory for a long time.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]ny!~
I appreciate those closest to you spending time with you before you move to the United States. I always hope to have friends who can make time for me under such circumstances, but most of them are already busy with their families, hehe.
Chammy

Before I left for the United States, I went on a one-night, two-day farewell trip with friends I had shared a dorm life with in high school and maintained a friendship with for over 10 years. 
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>> I went on an overnight farewell tour with friends I had lived with in high school and had been friends with for more than a decade before I departed for the United States.
The experience of my friends expressing their sadness, preparing gifts for me, and cooking delicious meals together will remain a cherished memory for a long time.
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>> It will always be a treasured memory of my friends sharing their sorrows, making me presents, and preparing delectable meals together.

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