My place

I live near near Gangnam in Seoul I moved here last year and live in an apartment. My apartment was build about 20 years ago, so the ambiance and both interior and exterior design is a little bit old. But when I moved here I renovated my apartment newly. Inside of my apartment, there are 3 rooms, a living room and a kitchen. One room is for me and my husband and another is for my baby and the other is for dressing. When we renovated my apartment, we removed the porch connected with living room to wide iving room. I painted the wall, made a new floor and install a new sink, so that it's almost new house now. Even though the exterior design is not good as much as new apartment , circumstance of here is fabulous. My apartment is surrounded by mountain and forest, so the air is very clean and quiet. Furthermore there are a lot of natural things, such as forest, stream and partk, so it's really nice to bring up children.Even thouhg I love my place, there is one weakness. There is no subway stations just near my apartment, so I have to take a taxi or a bus to get there. But I can go wherever easily by car even other province because there is a expressway just next to my apartment.

Hi there! Thank you so much for sharing the detailed description of your apartment.^^ I can imagine how quiet it is to live there and to raise kids.^^ I just notice two small corrections on your sentences. First, don\'t forget to put a punctuation mark in the end of your sentences (ex. period or question mark). Second, don\'t use the word \"but\" in the beginning of your sentence because it will make your sentence a fragment. I hope this will help you improve your writing. Overall, your composition is very good and organized. Kudos!^^ ---T.Kelly I live near near Gangnam in Seoul >> I live near Gangnam in Seoul.I moved here last year and live in an apartment. >> CORRECT! My apartment was build about 20 years ago, so the ambiance and both interior and exterior design is a little bit old. >> My apartment was build about 20 years ago, so the ambiance and both interior and exterior design were a little bit old. But when I moved here I renovated my apartment newly. >> But when I moved here, I renovasted my apartment. Inside of my apartment, there are 3 rooms, a living room and a kitchen. >> CORRECT! One room is for me and my husband and another is for my baby and the other is for dressing. >> CORRECT! When we renovated my apartment, we removed the porch connected with living room to wide iving room. >> When we renovated my apartment, we removed the porch connected with the living room to widen the living room. I painted the wall, made a new floor and install a new sink, so that it\'s almost new house now. >> I painted the wall, made a new floor and install a new sink, so that it almost looks like a new house now. Even though the exterior design is not good as much as new apartment , circumstance of here is fabulous. >> Even though the exterior design is not good as much as a new apartment , the circumstance here is fabulous. My apartment is surrounded by mountain and forest, so the air is very clean and quiet. >> CORRECT! Furthermore there are a lot of natural things, such as forest, stream and partk, so it\'s really nice to bring up children. >> Furthermore there are a lot of natural things, such as a forest, a stream and a park. It\'s really nice to bring up children in this place. Even thouhg I love my place, there is one weakness. >> Even though I love my place, there is one weakness. There is no subway stations just near my apartment, so I have to take a taxi or a bus to get there. >> CORRECT!But I can go wherever easily by car even other province because there is a expressway just next to my apartment. >> I can go wherever easily by car even in the other province because there is an expressway just next to my apartment.