My plan for career

I want to enjoy my time than to focus on my career as a doctor. I want to go to Australia or Canada to get a job and to have various experiences which I haven't had in Korea. But the job would be not very professional. In Korea, many people(I mean most of the people) focus on their career. So, spending some time for not very professional is really accpetable. In addition, Korean society considers age as a serious stuff. For example, it is difficult for pharmacists to get a job in big hospitals if they are over thirty. Korean society is kind of conservative. They don't want to have older workers than their boss.

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I want to enjoy my time than to focus on my career as a doctor.

>>Correct!

>>Or, I want to enjoy my time doing something else than focusing on my career as a doctor.

I want to go to Australia or Canada to get a job and to have various experiences which I haven't had in Korea.

>>Correct!

But the job would be not very professional.

>>The job there isn't considered very professional though.

In Korea, many people(I mean most of the people) focus on their career.

>>Correct!

So, spending some time for not very professional is really accpetable.

>>Spending some time doing other non professional things is really acceptable.

In addition, Korean society considers age as a serious stuff.

>>Correct!

For example, it is difficult for pharmacists to get a job in big hospitals if they are over thirty.

>>Correct!

Korean society is kind of conservative.

>>Correct!

They don't want to have older workers than their boss.

>>They don't want to have older workers other than their boss.