My plan for career

2011-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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I was surprised when I saw an English teacher in the US. His major was advertisement and he went back to school to study politics when he was 34 years old. It seldom happens in Korea. I envy the mind. They seem like they are enjoying their lives trying to figure out what they want to do and stick to their interest not just for their career. The system which select students for medical school will be changed in a few years. Now, they select students for master degree among universty graduates but in the future, they will change the system and select high school students for bachelor's degree. I think I have to use current system. So, I'll take the exam in this august and I think I'll have other opportunites which I can do what I want during my school.

강사 첨삭

[이름],

Thank you so much for this wonderful composition. I see that you are really observant. Keep up the good work. 

Good luck making your plans possible. As for the corrections, please be able to study them well. 

Congratulations for a job well done.

-RJ- 

I was surprised when I saw an English teacher in the US.

>>Correct!

 His major was advertisement and he went back to school to study politics when he was 34 years old.

>>Correct!

 It seldom happens in Korea.

>>Correct!

I envy the mind.

>>I am envious.

>>While thinking about him, I felt envious.

They seem like they are enjoying their lives trying to figure out what they want to do and stick to their interest not just for their career.

>>Correct!

The system which select students for medical school will be changed in a few years.

>> The system which selects students for medical school will be changed in a few years.

Now, they select students for master degree among universty graduates but in the future, they will change the system and select high school students for bachelor's degree.

>>Now, they select students for master's degree among universty graduates but in the future, they will change the system and select high school students for bachelor's degree.

I think I have to use current system.

>> I think I have to use the current system.

So, I'll take the exam in this august and I think I'll have other opportunites which I can do what I want during my school.

>>In conclusion, I'll take the exam this August and I think I'll have other opportunites which I can do what I want during my school days.

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