My plans for summer holidays! (1)
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, teacher!
Have you already planned for your summer holidays? Please give me some tips how to spend the well-filled summer vacation!
Actually, I already have set 2 plans for my holidays.
The first one is spending with my family. My brother is planning detailed plan now. Maybe, around the end of July, we will rent pension located in the South part of Korea, near beach, and have great time for 3-4 days. I guess taking care of my nieces will not be easy, haha. But I'm expecting it a lot. And, around the first week of Aug, I will also go near the beach, but at the West part of Korea at this time, and will have great time with my friends.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]! here are some suggestions for your summer:
1. Go to a summer camp. It will be fun . So if that's a problem, go spend a few days at a friend's house or spend time with a favorite relative. Be imaginative. Your imagination will help make this year's summer vacation a reality!
2. Hiking. Hiking is a popular sport but sometimes dangerous. It can also be great exercise and burn lots of calories. Most importantly, it's loads of fun and can be a great way to spend some quality time with family. Go with a buddy so both of you are with someone in the time of need. Find local hiking trails by visiting local municipal websites.
3. Crafts. Check out some good arts and crafts book from the local library. Buy the supplies needed and make some of the crafts. You can also sell the finished products in your front lawn and make some extra money to spend.
4. Computer games! If it is raining or no one wants to go outside with you, go to the computer and there are some great online games s
5. Traveling! Lucky you! Research ahead of time on the area you are traveling. For example, if you are going to Disney World, have an itinerary of the attractions that will be of interest to you.
6. Library or bookstore. Go to your local library or bookstore and buy a new book series. Reading is a great activity for summer, and it will help you brush up on skills.
7. Funk out. Get a good CD and put it on a radio or stereo. Play it on your fave song, and dance!!! Have a camera to tape you. This is great for slumber parties.
8. Sleepovers! A classic, but this is great to keep in touch with friends! Play games, eat, dance, share secrets, truth or dare and many more!
9. Aah, ice cream...the snack of the summer! Google ice cream recipe and it'll teach you how to make homemade ice cream. It'll be much more fun. Also, you can go out with friends or families to an ice cream restaurant and make an outing of it.
10. Movies. GO to the movies with friends and family!
11. Try gardening! Dedicate your time to a beautiful garden, full of the flowers God created! Use your creativity and develop a green thumb. Don't have time for a garden? Care for a cactus! They're cheap and cute, but watch out for those spines.
12. Learn a new language. Go to the library and borrow books on different languages, such as French, Spanish, and sign.
By the way, here are your corrections:
-Teacher JM
Hi, teacher!
>>>Hi teacher!
Have you already planned for your summer holidays?
Have you already planned for your summer holidays?
>>>Correct
Please give me some tips how to spend the well-filled summer vacation!
>>>Please give me some tips on how to spend the well-filled summer vacation!
Actually, I already have set 2 plans for my holidays.
Actually, I already have set 2 plans for my holidays.
>>>Correct
The first one is spending with my family.
The first one is spending with my family.
>>>The first one is to spend time with my family.
My brother is planning detailed plan now.
>>>My brother is making a detailed plan now.
Maybe, around the end of July, we will rent pension located in the South part of Korea, near beach, and have great time for 3-4 days.
>>>Maybe around the end of July, we will rent a pension near a beach located at the South part of Korea. And then we'll have a great time for 3-4 days.
I guess taking care of my nieces will not be easy, haha.
>>>Correct
But I'm expecting it a lot.
>>>But I've been expecting it(-it- the vacation or the babysitting?^^) a lot.
And, around the first week of Aug, I will also go near the beach, but at the West part of Korea at this time, and will have great time with my friends.
>>>And around the first week of Aug, I will also go near the beach at the West part of Korea, and I will spending it with my friends this time.
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