my purpose
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I have a lot of purpose or main goal in my life. The first is to become an actress. because it has been my dream since I was [이름] and it is my biggest goal now. second is to live healthily and happily with my family. because my family is the most important people in my life. I really want to do these two things!
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Hi Chloe!
I hope you achieve all of those goals in your life. :)
I have a lot of purpose or main goal in my life.
>> I have a lot of purpose or goals in my life.
The first is to become an actress. because it has been my dream since I was [이름] and it is my biggest goal now.
>> The first one is to become an actress because it has been my dream since I was [이름] and it is my biggest goal now.
second is to live healthily and happily with my family.
>> Second is live healthily and happily with my family because the are the most important people in my life.
because my family is the most important people in my life.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.
I really want to do these two things!
>> CORRECT
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