My relationship

2010-12-08 · 첨삭 강사 RJ

학생이 쓴 원문

I respect her very much since I think the people who have been living with right values are very mature so I can learn a lot from them and ask advice to them. We both don't like to watch movies since those are very stressful. Movies are made up story and they are supposed to attract many people's attention. So, they are trying to make a more serious or stressful situation to get more people's interest. Just watching horrible cases drives me crazy. The movie titled "Moss", which I watched a few months ago, made me so stressful. I couldn't even see the screen so I really wanted to get away from the teather. I just standed for my company blocking my eyes and ears. She doesn't watch same kind of dramas or movies also. Sending an email and getting a reply is a lot of pleasure to me.

강사 첨삭

[이름], This composition is wonderful and very fun to read. People have a lot of likes and dislikes and here I know now the things that you like and dislike in your life. Have a wonderful Wednesday.

-RJ

 My relationship

>>Correct

I respect her very much since I think the people who have been living with right values are very mature so I can learn a lot from them and ask advice to them.

>>I respect her very much because I think the people who have been living with the right values are very mature thatI can learn from then and ask them for advice.

We both don't like to watch movies since those are very stressful.

>>We both don't like to watching movies since doing so is very stressful.

 Movies are made up story and they are supposed to attract many people's attention.

>>Movies are made up stories and they are supposed to attract many people’s attention.

So, they are trying to make a more serious or stressful situation to get more people's interest.

>>So, they are trying to make more serious or stressful situatios to get more people’s interest.

Just watching horrible cases drives me crazy.

>>correct

The movie titled "Moss", which I watched a few months ago, made me so stressful.

>>The movie titles “Moss”, which I watched a few months ago made me so stressed.

I couldn't even see the screen so I really wanted to get away from the teather.

>>Correct

I just standed for my company blocking my eyes and ears.

>>I just stood for my company blocking my eyes and ears.

She doesn't watch same kind of dramas or movies also.

>>She also doesn’t watch the same kinds of dramas and movies.

 Sending an email and getting a reply is a lot of pleasure to me.

>>Sending an e-mail and getting a reply is a lot of pleasure to me.

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