My resume
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear my teacher Nina.
Pls help me correct this material for job interview.
Thank you for having me today.
My name is [Name] Ha and 35 years old.
I have two values for this position that I applied for.
The first thing is commucication skill in Jananese.
I had graduated from University in Japan and then I worked at a global Japanese company for 8 years career with my Japanese.
For my fluent English, I have keep learning English.
The second thing is the work experience of global SCM in SONY.
I set up the logistic HUB process and handled SCM improvement project
in SONY.
My this experience is helpful to your company growth.
My carrer is suitable for the job opening of Ricoh Korea.
It is the chance for me to show my ability with my professional experience in SCM part.
If you have any question, I do speak in Japanese. Thank you.
강사 첨삭
Hello there!!
How are you??
I hope you are doing well today.
English is somewhat tricky, specially when using it to apply for a job.
Well here\'s your modified composition...
See you later...
--T. Nina ^_^
Dear my teacher Nina.>>Dear Teacher Nina, Pls help me correct this material for job interview.
>>Please help me correct this material for my job interview.
Thank you for having me today.
>>Thank you for taking the time to check my resume. My name is [Name] Ha and 35 years old.
>>My name is [Name] Ha and I\'m 35 years old.
I have two values for this position that I applied for.>>I have two values/good qualifications for this position that I\'m applying for.
The first thing is commucication skill in Jananese.>>First, I have good Japanese communication skills.
I had graduated from University in Japan and then I worked at a global Japanese company for 8 years career with my Japanese.>>I graduated from a University in Japan and then I worked at a global Japanese company for 8 years.
For my fluent English, I have keep learning English.>>For my English skills, I have been learning English for some time now.
The second thing is the work experience of global SCM in SONY.>>Second is that I worked for/in SONY for global SCM.
I set up the logistic HUB process and handled SCM improvement project in SONY.
>>I was responsible for setting up the logistics HUB process and I also handled the SCM improvement project in SONY.
My this experience is helpful to your company growth.>>This experience that I acquired is helpful to your company\'s growth.
My carrer is suitable for the job opening of Ricoh Korea.>>My job experience is very much suitable for the job opening of Ricoh Korea.
It is the chance for me to show my ability with my professional experience in SCM part.>>I hope you will consider giving me a chance to show my ability and the knowledge and skills that I have when it comes to SCM part/s.
If you have any question, I do speak in Japanese. Thank you. >>If you have any question/s, please feel free to contact me. I speak Japanese, so you can converse with me in this language. Thank you.
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